Assessment Description:
According to strategies discussed in Chapter 4 of the textbook, post a message in which you explain the techniques you will use for your introductory paragraph and why they might be effective for you. Then write or revise your introductory paragraph using the techniques you have chosen. Post your introduction along with your explanation.
During the week, respond to others’ introductions and explain what you think they did well. Also, offer some advice for revision. You may also offer counterarguments by explaining how someone might disagree with their view.
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SOLUTION to ENG-105: English Composition I - Topic 7 DQ 1.
SAMPLE 1
Hello class,
As I was reading through Chapter 4 of Writing with Purpose, I came across different strategies I can use when writing an introductory paragraph. I believe these techniques will be effective as I write my commentary essay on the rising trend of Attention-Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD) diagnoses. First, I intend to start with a catchy hook that will immediately grab the attention of the reader. As Grand Canyon University (2022) notes, “the purpose of the introduction is to draw readers in and engage readers in writing”. To achieve this, I will begin with a statistic about the prevalence of ADHD diagnoses among children in the United States (U.S.).
The chapter also emphasizes on the importance of discussing the background of a subject, thus I will provide some brief background information on what ADHD is and the trend of increasing diagnoses. By doing so, I believe the readers will be oriented on the topic and its significance. Further, I will conclude the introductory paragraph with a thesis statement to present my main claim. Using these techniques, I wrote the following introductory paragraph:
“Attention-Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD) diagnoses have risen dramatically in recent decades, with approximately 1 in 9 U.S. children receiving an ADHD diagnosis by 2022 (Danielson et al., 2024). This neurodevelopmental disorder, characterized by persistent inattention, hyperactivity, and impulsivity, has become increasingly prevalent among children and adolescents, raising serious concern across different groups including medical professionals, parents, and educators alike (Li et al., 2023). In this context, this commentary will seek to explore the trend of rising ADHD diagnoses as well as its potential causes, impacts on individuals, and any potential controversies related to this trend. Grand Canyon University (2022) posits that when explaining a subject, it is important to find a pattern of meaning. As a result, the commentary will also argue that a clear pattern of evolving diagnostic criteria and increased awareness emerges as major causes of this trend”. I believe this introductory paragraph will effectively engage the reader as I have utilized all the techniques discussed in Chapter 4, however, I am open to any corrections on any areas of improvement.
References
Danielson, M. L., Claussen, A. H., Bitsko, R. H., Katz, S. M., Newsome, K., Blumberg, S. J., ... & Ghandour, R. (2024). ADHD Prevalence among US children and adolescents in 2022: Diagnosis, severity, co-occurring disorders, and treatment. Journal of Clinical Child & Adolescent Psychology, 1-18. https://doi.org/10.1080/15374416.2024.233562
Grand Canyon University (2022). Writing with Purpose. (2nd ed.)
Li, Y., Yan, X., Li, Q., Li, Q., Xu, G., Lu, J., & Yang, W. (2023). Prevalence and trends in diagnosed ADHD among US children and adolescents, 2017-2022. JAMA Network Open, 6(10), e2336872-e2336872. https://doi.org/10.1001/jamanetworkopen.2023.36872